Personal Goal: Use metaphors, illerations, similes,
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Holiday
What you did in the weekend
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Structure: title, orientation, sequence of events, concluding statement
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Describe characters & places
Use metaphors, illerations, similes,
On Saturday the 19th of October, my mother, my father, my brother and I all went to a small gallery with my brothers girlfriend Meg to see a beautiful piece of art that Don (megs dad) had made out of a gorgeous light brown timber. It was a 3D mandala like wall-hanging to raise money for Kileys cancer medication.
Kiley is a mother of two Oli a 14 year old and Meg a 20 year old. Kiley was diagnosed with stage 4 incurable breast cancer in September 2017, her cancer has recently spread to her kidneys, lungs and liver. Don and Kiley divorced, and since, Kiley has gotten married to a man named Johnny they can not afford the medication that Kiley needs. (Her medication is $7,000 a month $84,000 a year.)
So Don has kindly made this art piece to raise money for her medication the bidding price started $2,500,
There was also a go fund me page made for Kiley within the first hour she had raised $2,700+ and continued to grow, this brought what felt like a huge wave of smiles to Kileys friends & family. It was as beautiful as a fresh bouquet of flowers, the gallery was made up of extremely supportive new Zealand artists, I am so glad that I was able to attend this art bidding.
By Chelo
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Wow! Chelo this is a very thoughtful and informative piece of writing, well done. I like how you have included so much about what is happening. Maybe you could describe the people a little more or add some similes/metaphors? How much did the mandala sell for?
ReplyDeleteGreat job Chelo I love your writing and your information and maybe focus on putting capital on every 'I'.Love your writing and using descriptive words.
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